Who is the person you admire the most? Why?

2023-06-26 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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It is Jeremy Bentham. It\'s because he is an philosophist and I thought his thinking is really same with me. So I started to read about him and studied. His thinking is really objective and smart. I think he is my favorite person who has same critical thinking.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Daisy. ^^
Thank you very much for sharing who your favorite person is. 
I have noticed that you like reading about philosophers and that\'s truly impressive. :)
You have a lot to learn from Jeremy Bentham and I think he is a good role model for you. 
The person admire the most is Robert Kiyosaki. 
Anyway, I hope you\'re doing great at the moment. 
See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry

It is Jeremy Bentham. 
>> CORRECT!
It\'s because he is an philosophist and I thought his thinking is really same with me. 
>> It\'s because he is a philosopher and I thought his way of thinking is really the same with me. 
So I started to read about him and studied. 
>> So I started to read and study about him . 
His thinking is really objective and smart. 
>> His way of thinking is really objective and smart. 
I think he is my favorite person who has same critical thinking.
>> I think he is my favorite person who is critical at thinking.

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