Who is your favorite actor and why? Answer in a few sentences.
학생이 쓴 원문
I have become a fan of Emma Watson since I watched her UN speech of 2014. It was about gender equality, and she said women have the right to be treated equally in the society, but no countries don’t allow them to achieve it. I like her way of expressing and holding on to her belief because it’s still not easy to carry the ball and say the word ‘Feminism’ today officially.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Judy!
This is a very meaningful answer. As actors, they have the power to influence us. Hence, Emma Watson uses hers to empower women across countries. Well, we should listen to her and use our empowerment to impact the society positively and work with men in harmony.
Take note of the grammar suggestions I placed below. Some of them are the insertion of the correct preposition as well as the subject-verb agreement alternate on your second sentence. Overall, excellent homework answer!
Catch you later!
-T. Donna~
>> I have become a fan of Emma Watson since I watched her UN speech in 2014.
It was about gender equality, and she said women have the right to be treated equally in the society, but no countries don’t allow them to achieve it.
>> Correct!
Or: It was about gender equality, and she said women have the right to be treated equally in the society, but no country allows them to achieve it.
I like her way of expressing and holding on to her belief because it’s still not easy to carry the ball and say the word ‘Feminism’ today officially.
>> Correct!
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