Who is your favorite Winter Olympics player and why? answer in a few sentences.
학생이 쓴 원문
I become a fan of Choi Min Jeong, female short track speed skating player. It was hope for me when she outrode all players and was in the lead, and I realized medal must be given fairly to whom devotes his or her life.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Judy!
Congratulations to your country and to Choi Min Jeong who won it for you! Truly, the medal is well-deserved by someone who fought fair and square, the one who was the most hungry and desperate for it, and most of all, the most confident. This is her.
I am positive that you can learn much from her discipline in training and winning this Olympic gold medal.
Very good on your homework answer! Please read the second sentence carefully and take note of the slight suggestions I made. Well done!
See you in class when the Olympics is over.
-T. Donna =)
I become a fan of Choi Min Jeong, female short track speed skating player.
>> Correct!
It was hope for me when she outrode all players and was in the lead, and I realized medal must be given fairly to whom devotes his or her life.
>> It was a hope for me when she outrode all the players and was in the lead, and I realized that the medal must be given fairly to whom devotes his or her life to it.
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