Who is your greatest influence in life? Write in a maximum of 5 sentences.

2015-10-19 · 첨삭 강사 Carmen

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I think my parents are the greatest influence in my life. They gave life to me, moreover, they let me go to school and provided excellent education until become an adult. So that I can be a member of the society and get a job in a competitive society. In addition, My boy friend also give influence to me. After I graduated from university and started to make money, I found that it is much more close to and dependent on boy friend than parents. I am always influenced by him .For example life style, my values of the life and so on.

강사 첨삭

Good evening, [이름]! Happy Monday! I hope that you are just fine while reading this. I noticed that you have a very good heart and it is because of your influences in life. Cherish your moment with them always. They made you who you are today. Stay happy and see you later!   Teacher Carmen ^^   I think my parents are the greatest influence in my life. >> I think my parents are the greatest influences in my life. They gave life to me, moreover, they let me go to school and provided excellent education until become an adult. >> They gave me life, sent me to school and provided quality education until I became an adult.   So that I can be a member of the society and get a job in a competitive society. >> So that I can belong and get a job in this competitive society. In addition, My boy friend also give influence to me. >> In addition, my boyfriend also influences me.   After I graduated from university and started to make money, I found that it is much more close to and dependent on boy friend than parents. >> After I graduated from the university and started making money, I found out that I became dependent to my boyfriend than my parents. I am always influenced by him. >> Correct!   For example life style, my values of the life and so on. >>For example, he influences my lifestyle, values and so on.

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