Who is your superhero?

2019-09-20 · 첨삭 강사 Oneil

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There are many people who have talent in the world such as Steve Jobs and in terms of sports. I also respect their achieve because they fulfill their dream and I want to be someone like them. However, I think my superhero is my family. Most of all, they always give me motivation, courage, and confidence making my dream. Also, when I didn’t something well, they never judge anything. They just tell positive word.

강사 첨삭

Thank you :) 

There are many people who have talent in the world such as Steve Jobs and in terms of sports.
>> There are many people who have talent in the world such as Steve Jobs, and in terms of sports too.

 I also respect their achieve because they fulfill their dream and I want to be someone like them. 
>>  I also respect their achievements because they fulfilled their dreams. I want to be someone like them.

However, I think my superhero is my family. 
>> Correct.

Most of all, they always give me motivation, courage, and confidence making my dream. 
>> Correct.

Also, when I didn’t something well, they never judge anything. They just tell positive word.
>> Also, when I didn’t do something well, they never judge me. They just give me some positive words and advice.

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