Who’s your biggest music influence?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my case, my childhood friend had the biggest influence on my music taste. When I was young, I was not very interested in music, especially pop music. However, one of my friends was a huge fan of pop songs, and one day, while we were on the bus, she shared one side of her earphones with me and suggested that I listen to a song she liked. I still remember that moment clearly because I was only 10 years old. It was my first time listening to pop music, and the song was \"Toxic\" by Britney Spears. Even though I could not understand the lyrics, the beat was so intense and different from the other songs I had listened to before. That moment led me to enjoy pop culture, and I still like it to this day.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [Name]! This is a really warm and nostalgic story. It is amazing how one shared moment and one song on a bus can change how someone feels about music. Your friend clearly introduced you to something that stayed with you for a long time.
~T. Jenna
In my case, my childhood friend had the biggest influence on my music taste.
>>Correct, or: My biggest music influence was actually my childhood friend.
When I was young, I was not very interested in music, especially pop music.
>>Correct, or: When I was younger, I was not very interested in music, especially pop music.
However, one of my friends was a huge fan of pop songs, and one day, while we were on the bus, she shared one side of her earphones with me and suggested that I listen to a song she liked. I still remember that moment clearly because I was only 10 years old. It was my first time listening to pop music, and the song was \"Toxic\" by Britney Spears.
>>Correct, or: However, one of my close friends was a huge fan of Western pop songs, and she often listened to music everywhere we went. I still remember one specific moment when I was about ten years old. We were riding the bus together after school, and she shared one side of her earphones with me and asked me to listen to a song she liked. The song was Toxic by Britney Spears.
Even though I could not understand the lyrics, the beat was so intense and different from the other songs I had listened to before.
>>Correct, or: Even though I could not understand the lyrics at the time, I was immediately drawn to the strong beat and unique sound because it felt completely different from the music I had heard before.
That moment led me to enjoy pop culture, and I still like it to this day.
>>Correct, or: After that experience, I gradually became interested in pop music and pop culture, and I still enjoy them today. Looking back, I think that small moment really changed my music taste in a big way.
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My biggest music influence was actually my childhood friend. When I was younger, I was not very interested in music, especially pop music. However, one of my close friends was a huge fan of Western pop songs, and she often listened to music everywhere we went. I still remember one specific moment when I was about ten years old. We were riding the bus together after school, and she shared one side of her earphones with me and asked me to listen to a song she liked. The song was Toxic by Britney Spears. Even though I could not understand the lyrics at the time, I was immediately drawn to the strong beat and unique sound because it felt completely different from the music I had heard before. After that experience, I gradually became interested in pop music and pop culture, and I still enjoy them today. Looking back, I think that small moment really changed my music taste in a big way.
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