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Dear [Name], I don’t know if you can see this composition after you come back. But I want to write this to you. I heard you’re sick. I’m so sorry to hear that. I hope you will get well soon. Last Saturday I had a presentation but it was really awful. After that I lost my will. I didn’t do anything even if it was holidays. My English was really poor. After professor’s critics, I had to say which theme I want to concentrate on. The sudden question was confusing for me. So I asked the professor if I can speak in Japanese. Oh my god. I was really shame. I really want never to happen again like this. Even if you’re not, I’ll continue my study with other teacher. After you come back, I hope to talk to you again. See you. Best regards, [이름]

Hi Joo Yun! This is teacher Jazz again. I'm so happy to see and check another composition of yours. Please cheer up and don't lose your will. Just keep writing and maybe soon your Teacher Lirah will be able to see your compositions. Have a nice day! Jazz ^^   I don't know if you can see this composition after you come back. >>I'm not sure if you can see this composition when you come back. But I want to write this to you. >>But I want to write this for you. I heard you’re sick. >>correct I’m so sorry to hear that. >>correctI hope you will get well soon. >>correct Last Saturday I had a presentation but it was really awful. >>correct After that I lost my will. >>correctI didn’t do anything even if it was holidays. >>I didn't do anything even if it was a holiday. My English was really poor. >>My English is really poor. After professor’s critics, I had to say which theme I want to concentrate on. >>After listening to the professor's critic, I had to say which theme do I want to concentrate on. The sudden question was confusing for me. >>The sudden question confused me. So I asked the professor if I can speak in Japanese. >>So I asked the professor if I could speak in Japanese. Oh my god. I was really shame. >>Oh my God, I was really ashamed. I really want never to happen again like this. >>I really this will never happen again. Even if you’re not, I’ll continue my study with other teacher. >>Even if you won't be my teacher anymore, I'll continue to study with another teacher. After you come back, I hope to talk to you again. >>When you come back, I hope to talk to you again.