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It is hard to balance our work with other parts of our life. As for me, that\'s because I don\'t usually make my plans. Making plans is so important thing to make it, because plans make me what to do and what I didn\'t do which makes us lean toward other parts of our life. So, I am going to try to make my plans
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It is hard to balance our work with other parts of our life.
>>>It is hard to balance our work with other parts of our lives.
Making plans is so important thing to make it, because plans make me what to do and what I didn\'t do which makes us lean toward other parts of our life.
>>> Making plans is so important thing to follow because plans tell me what to do and didn\'t do which makes us lean toward other parts of our lives.
So, I am going to try to make my plans
>>>So, I am going to try to make plans and follow it.
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