Why are families important?
학생이 쓴 원문
Obviously, it\'s a source to overcome something when I\'m sad. I guess there\'s only my family who can encourage me when I\'m sad. And only my family who can share the happiness with each other. Also, if I have my own child, the reason I should work hard for them. So, that\'s why it\'s important.
강사 첨삭
Failures are a part of life. Learn from them and work with motivation in the present which will help you to be successful in future. Dear [Name], believe in yourself and continue doing your best.
Obviously, it\'s a source to overcome something when I\'m sad.
>>> Obviously, it\'s a source of strength to overcome something when I\'m sad.
I guess there\'s only my family who can encourage me when I\'m sad.
>>> I guess it\'s only my family who can encourage me when I\'m sad.
And only my family who can share the happiness with each other.
>>> And only my family can share the happiness with each other.
Also, if I have my own child, the reason I should work hard for them.
>>> Also, if I have my own child, I should work hard for them.
So, that\'s why it\'s important.
>>> So, that\'s why family is very important.
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