Why are some people who leave school early more successful compared with those who complete their st
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If someone has a confident dream, he/she will be live in a successful life regardless of school graduation. There are many enterprisers who didn\'t graduate school, and then they did something which they liked or are good at. The representative example is Steeve Jobs. He quit the university on first grade and got a job in game company. Finally, he developed a innovative product which is Iphone. After that, many people believe that education at school is not more important than creativity. I have a same idea with people, school is not that such important but I know that we have learnt a lot of subjects at school that will be a foundation stone. So, students can apply for various job because they have learnt basic concept and theory in most fields. Under the new industrial revolution, creativity is the most important key but I think we can\'t improve creativity without basic knowledge which is acquired at school. We can find a lot of people who experienced their failure. We only know succe
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
If someone has a confident dream, he/she will be live in a successful life regardless of school graduation.
>>> If someone is confident in reaching his dream, he/she will live in a successful life regardless of educational attainment.
There are many enterprise rs who didn\'t graduate school, and then they did something which they liked or are good at.
>>> CORRECT
The representative example is Steeve Jobs.
>>> CORRECT
He quit university on first his grade and got a job in a gaming company.
>>> CORRECT
Finally, he developed a innovative product which is Iphone.
>>> CORRECT
After that, many people believe that education at school is not more important than creativity.
>>> CORRECT
I have the same idea with people, school is not that such important but I know that we have learnt a lot of subjects at school that will be our foundation.
>>> CORRECT
So, students can apply for various jobs because they have learnt basic concepts and theories in most fields.
>>> CORRECT
Under the new industrial revolution, creativity is the most important key but I think we can\'t improve creativity without basic knowledge which is acquired at school.
>>> CORRECT
We can find a lot of people who experienced failures.
>>> CORRECT
We only know success.
>>> CORRECT
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