Why are the ambition important?
학생이 쓴 원문
I interpret ambition as for the job. Getting ambition helps me do my best for self development. It makes planning something, studying, controlling myself and so on. Consequently it feels me like being great men. And it corresponds to building my own money. Of course, life doesn’t require only money. However I want to live life without financial anxiety. Sadly money can make obstacles. Anyway, ambitions can make my life prosperous.
Also, I know that you try your best for our time always. Thanks to you, I get energy and courage. Thank you so much! Have a happy week~
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름] [이름]!~
I hope you have a clear vision of the things you wish to pursue in life. It could be difficult but worthwhile. Always be focused and have a clear objective. ^____^
Thank you for appreciating my work~
Chammy
I interpret ambition as for the job.
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>>I view ambition as a desire for the job.
Getting ambition helps me do my best for self development.
>>Getting ambition helps me do my best for self-development.
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>> Having ambition motivates me to strive for personal growth.
It makes planning something, studying, controlling myself, and so on..
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>> It helps me with studying, planning, self-control, etc.
Consequently, it feels me like being great men.
>> Consequently, it makes me feel like a great individual.
And it corresponds to building my own money. Of course, life doesn’t require only money.
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>> Although life is not just about money, ambition corresponds to making my own money.
However, I want to live life without financial anxiety.
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>> Moreover, it is preferable to live a life with financial freedom.
Sadly money can make obstacles. Anyway, ambitions can make my life prosperous.
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>> On the contrary, money could create hurdles even though ambition can make an opulent life.
Also, I know that you try your best for our time always.
>> Also, I know that you always try your best.
Thanks to you, I get energy and courage. Thank you so much! Have a happy week~
>>Correct
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