Why are the rich facing a lot more danger than the poor or average people?

2014-07-04 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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It is quite natural that the more you have, the higher risks you would be exposed to. You could be targeted by your opponents, swindlers or robberies. If you are poor, there are less chances that you could lose something. If you are rich, you’ll make all-out effort to protect your wealth, which requires you to pay attention to various things. It consumes your energy and makes you fatigued after all. It’s hard for you to maintain your tranquility and peace in your mind if you pursue a more fortune. The rich have more to lose and many people would be glad to relieve them of what they have. A tree laden with ripe fruits always face the danger of attacks from all side. A tree which has little or no fruit just don't bother about people’s conspiracy about taking away its possession. However, you should not justify ourselves for being poor. Rich people believe that they create their lives while poor people believe that life happens to them. Poor people are just dreaming about their dreams.

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T.G.I.F Sir [이름]^^ A wonderful composition and marvelous thoughts. Thanks for making my day! You sentences are long and meaningful. I admire you for always sharing your ideas with me. Thanks again for inspiring me today. Hihihihi! Talk to you soon. Let us be happy because we can take a rest tomorrow. Teacher Nina   It is quite natural that the more you have, the higher risks you would be exposed to. >> Correct! You could be targeted by your opponents, swindlers or robberies. >> Correct! If you are poor, there are less chances that you could lose something. >> Correct! If you are rich, you’ll make all-out effort to protect your wealth, which requires you to pay attention to various things. >> Correct! >> OR: If you are richt, you\'ll do anything to protect your wealth. which requires you to focus on different things. It consumes your energy and makes you fatigued after all. >> Correct! >> OR: It uses up your energy and makes you fatigued after all. It’s hard for you to maintain your tranquility and peace in your mind if you pursue a more fortune. >> It\'s hard for you to maintain your tranquility and peach of mind if you pursue more fortune. The rich have more to lose and many people would be glad to relieve them of what they have. >> Correct! A tree laden with ripe fruits always face the danger of attacks from all side. >> Correct! A tree which has little or no fruit just don\'t bother about people’s conspiracy about taking away its possession. >> Correct! However, you should not justify ourselves for being poor. >> However, we should not justify ourselves for being poor. Rich people believe that they create their lives while poor people believe that life happens to them. >> Correct! Poor people are just dreaming about their dreams. >> Correct!

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