Why are the rich facing a lot more danger than the poor or average people?

2016-07-27 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Rather than the possibility of being robbed or thieved, the rich seems to have more worries in mind. The more you have, the much concerns you will have because you own more things to protect. If you have nothing, there is nothing to worry about. Let’s say that you have gold and expensive jewels in your house. You have to install a CCTV, building a tall fence with concertina wires installed on the top of it, and hire security guards. Even with all the enhanced and robust security systems, you won’t have peace of mind and rarely have a good night sleep. When we go to the countryside, we can see most houses don’t have fences or even entrance doors because they feel it’s safe and nothing to lose. Rich people often become an easy target to robbers. Having a lot of money has drawbacks, especially if you get rich overnight. If you are wealthy, there will be a lot of crooks attracted to your wealth. After all, more money doesn’t make us happier. Rich people get exposed to more risks.

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What a perfect and wonderful composition, Sir [이름]!I definitely agree with all of the things that you wrote below.It is really difficult to be rich. But a lot of people want to have lots of money to have a better life. They even work overseas to earn more than what they receive in their country.Aside from the reason of having a lot of money, what do you think are the other reasons why people leave? Thank you so much for your time and effort. See you in class. Teacher Nina   Rather than the possibility of being robbed or thieved, the rich seems to have more worries in mind. >> correct The more you have, the much concerns you will have because you own more things to protect. >> correct If you have nothing, there is nothing to worry about. >> correct Let’s say that you have gold and expensive jewels in your house. >> correct You have to install a CCTV, building a tall fence with concertina wires installed on the top of it, and hire security guards. >> correct Even with all the enhanced and robust security systems, you won’t have peace of mind and rarely have a good night sleep. >> correct When we go to the countryside, we can see most houses don’t have fences or even entrance doors because they feel it’s safe and nothing to lose. >> correct Rich people often become an easy target to robbers. >> correct Having a lot of money has drawbacks, especially if you get rich overnight. >> correct If you are wealthy, there will be a lot of crooks attracted to your wealth. >> correct After all, more money doesn’t make us happier. >> correct Rich people get exposed to more risks. >> correct

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