Why Bloomberg?

2022-04-11 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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The role that Bloomberg has in digital transformation motivates me. Bloomberg is a market leader in the financial technology industry. The technology can benefit the client to ground the reasoning by connecting unrelated data points. Such an environment would allow me to devise an innovative approach that could push me outside of my comfort zone. Expanding the learning curve and development opportunities is what I am looking for. Also, an innovative environment would lead to global reach. Bloomberg\'s extensive customer base and product portfolio could pose a challenge that could not be tackled by one person. Collaboration with different teams and offices would help me to expand my network to exchange unique ideas. Then I will seek to take the initiative to incorporate cultural perspectives when providing a solution. Therefore, I believe working at Bloomberg would provide me to expand a cross-cultural relationship to deliver a comprehensive approach to the fast-paced financial market.

강사 첨삭

Perfect! Thanks again Aciel!

The role that Bloomberg has in digital transformation motivates me. 
>>   correct
Bloomberg is a market leader in the financial technology industry. 
>>  correct
The technology can benefit the client to ground the reasoning by connecting unrelated data points. 
>>  correct
Such an environment would allow me to devise an innovative approach that could push me outside of my comfort zone. 
>>  correct
Expanding the learning curve and development opportunities is what I am looking for. 
>>  correct
Also, an innovative environment would lead to global reach. 
>>  correct
Bloomberg\'s extensive customer base and product portfolio could pose a challenge that could not be tackled by one person. 
>>  correct
Collaboration with different teams and offices would help me to expand my network to exchange unique ideas. 
>>  correct
Then I will seek to take the initiative to incorporate cultural perspectives when providing a solution. 
>>  correct
Therefore, I believe working at Bloomberg would provide me to expand a cross-cultural relationship to deliver a comprehensive approach to the fast-paced financial market.
>>   correct

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