Why do adults get fat whèn they become older?

2024-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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I think because adults eat a lot of alcohol and eat food as they get older. And they get many stress, so continues fat.

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                             Why do adults get fat when they become older?

I think because adults eat a lot of alcohol and eat food as they get older.
>> I think it’s because adults drink a lot of alcohol and eat a lot as they get older.

And they get many stress, so continues fat.
>> And they’re under a lot of stress so they continue to gain weight.

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