Why do boys like video games more than girls?

2012-02-01 · 첨삭 강사 Joan

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QUESTION: Why do boys like video games more than girls? First of all, I think boys like to play video games more than girls because they like adventure, and like to play outside alot. Boys are more active than girls. On the other hand, girls like to play quietly and read books in silence, I think. I think this question is similar as ' Why do boys like sports more than girls?' Second, I think girls don't like games. I think they don't violence. Well, that doesn't mean that boy actually like violence, they just like play games of it.

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Hello [이름], Thank you for doing your homework. Keep it up! See you later! Try to think of more reasons to the question to support your answer. T.Joan Here are your corrections: QUESTION: Why do boys like video games more than girls? First of all, I think boys like to play video games more than girls because they like adventure, and like to play outside alot. >>Correct! Boys are more active than girls. >>Correct! On the other hand, girls like to play quietly and read books in silence, I think. >>Correct! I think this question is similar as \' Why do boys like sports more than girls?\' >>Correct! Second, I think girls don\'t like games. I think they don\'t violence. >>I think girls don\'t  like video games because they are violent. Well, that doesn\'t mean that boy actually like violence, they just like play games of it. >>Well, that doesn\'t mean that boys actually like violence but, they just likeplaying them.

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