why do I choose you?
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Hi Dana,
I apologize for not checking your answers immediately. I have terrible sore throat that sorts of tamper the clarity of my voice, so it\'s quite impossible for me to teach. Hopefully, it\'ll get better soon. Please review the corrections I made below. If I changed anything that I shouldn\'t have, please inform me.
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I would like to say that there are 3 reasons such as, oncology experience, people management and cross-functional team leadership.
>> Correct
>> OR: I have the necessary skill set required for the job, such as oncology experience, people management and cross-functional team leadership.
First, I know how to lead the market change in oncology.
>> Correct
For examples, when I was a product manger in 2008, I developed the NET market through conductiong the diagnosis campaign introducing new diagnostic method and developing KTLs.
>> For example, when I was a product manager in 2008, I developed the NET market through conducting diagnosis campaign by introducing new diagnostic method and developing KTLs.
Ultimately Novartis found 200 patients for the first 2 years and led orginize to NET study gorup.
>>Ultimately, Novartis found 200 patients for the first 2 years that led to the organization of the NET study group.
It was my first successful experience. I also successfully switched glivec to 2nd drug with \"Path in CML\" program to encourage doctors monitor deeper response with digital PCR.
>> Correct
I also successfully utilized RAS testing program for Eribitux at Mearck.
>> In addition to that, I also successfully utilized RAS testing program for Eribitux at Mearck.
Sencond, I experienced to manage people for more than 8 years.
>> Second, I have more than 8 years of experience managing people.
>> OR: Second, I have managerial experience for more than 8 years.
I managed one or two product manager as a marketing manager for 7 years and also managed 7 sales reps for more than 1 year.
>> Correct
3rd, I know how to get things done as cross-functional team. I understand the perspectives as MSL
>> Third, I know how to get things done as a member of a cross-functional team. I understand the perspectives as MSL
I have the necessary skill set required for the job, such as oncology experience, people management and cross-functional team leadership.
First, I know how to lead the market change in oncology. For example, when I was a product manager in 2008, I developed the NET market through conducting diagnosis campaign by introducing new diagnostic method and developing KTLs. Ultimately, Novartis found 200 patients for the first 2 years that led to the organization of the NET study group. It was my first successful experience. I also successfully switched glivec to 2nd drug with \"Path in CML\" program to encourage doctors monitor deeper response with digital PCR. In addition to that, I also successfully utilized RAS testing program for Eribitux at Mearck. Second, I have managerial experience for more than 8 years. I managed one or two product manager as a marketing manager for 7 years and also managed 7 sales reps for more than 1 year. Third, I know how to get things done as a member or leader (whichever is applicable) of a cross-functional team. I understand the perspectives as MSL
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