why do I choose you?

2018-04-11 · 첨삭 강사 Amanda

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I would like to say that there are 3 reasons such as oncology experience, people management and cross-functional team leadership. First, I know how to lead the market change in oncology.For examples, when I was a product manger in 2008, I developed the NET market through conductiong the diagnosis campaign introducing new diagnostic method and developing KTLs. Ultimately Novartis found 200 patients for the first 2 years and led orginize to NET study gorup.It was my first successful experience.I also successfuly switched glivec to 2nd drug with "Path in CML" program to encourage doctors monitor deeper response with digital PCR. I also successfully utilized RAS testing program for Eribitux at Mearck. Sencond, I experienced to manage people for more than 8 years. I managed one or two product manager as a markeing manager for 7 years and also manged 7 sales reps for more than 1 year. 3rd, I know how to get things done as cross-functional team. I understand the perspectives as MSL

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Hi Dana,

I apologize for not checking your answers immediately. I have terrible sore throat that sorts of tamper the clarity of my voice, so it\'s quite impossible for me to teach. Hopefully, it\'ll  get better soon. Please review the corrections I made below. If I changed anything that I shouldn\'t have, please inform me.

Thank you.

See you!


Amanda ^-^


I would like to say that there are 3 reasons such as, oncology experience, people management and cross-functional team leadership. 

>> Correct

>> OR: I have the necessary skill set required for the job, such as oncology experience, people management and cross-functional team leadership.


 First, I know how to lead the market change in oncology.

>> Correct


For examples, when I was a product manger in 2008, I developed the NET market through conductiong the diagnosis campaign introducing new diagnostic method and developing KTLs.

>> For example, when I was a product manager in 2008, I developed the NET market through conducting diagnosis campaign by introducing new diagnostic method and developing KTLs.


Ultimately Novartis found 200 patients for the first 2 years and led orginize to NET study gorup.

>>Ultimately, Novartis found 200 patients for the first 2 years  that led to the organization of the NET study group.  


It was my first successful experience. I also successfully switched glivec to 2nd drug with \"Path in CML\" program to encourage doctors monitor deeper response with digital PCR.

>> Correct


 

I also successfully utilized RAS testing program for Eribitux at Mearck.

>> In addition to that, I also successfully utilized RAS testing program for Eribitux at Mearck.


Sencond, I experienced to manage people for more than 8 years.

>> Second, I have more than 8 years of experience managing people.

>> OR:  Second, I have managerial experience for more than 8 years.


I managed one or two product manager as a marketing manager for 7 years and also managed 7 sales reps for more than 1 year.

>> Correct


 3rd, I know how to get things done as cross-functional team. I understand the perspectives as MSL

>> Third, I know how to get things done as a member of a cross-functional team. I understand the perspectives as MSL




I have the necessary skill set required for the job, such as oncology experience, people management and cross-functional team leadership.

First, I know how to lead the market change in oncology. For example, when I was a product manager in 2008, I developed the NET market through conducting diagnosis campaign by introducing new diagnostic method and developing KTLs. Ultimately, Novartis found 200 patients for the first 2 years  that led to the organization of the NET study group. It was my first successful experience. I also successfully switched glivec to 2nd drug with \"Path in CML\" program to encourage doctors monitor deeper response with digital PCR. In addition to that, I also successfully utilized RAS testing program for Eribitux at Mearck. Second, I have managerial experience for more than 8 years. I managed one or two product manager as a marketing manager for 7 years and also managed 7 sales reps for more than 1 year. Third, I know how to get things done as a member or leader (whichever is applicable) of a cross-functional team. I understand the perspectives as MSL     



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