Why do many celebrities have drug and alcohol problems?

2014-01-28 · 첨삭 강사 May

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The sad thing is its not just celebrities who are ruining their lives with drugs and alcohol.I won't pretend that it isn't more accessible to celebrities because they have lots of money and the means to have it but this is a problem in every day life that just about anyone can fell into their not careful. Also, the celebrities that cannot adjust to the stress of their new life will lean on drugs for support. Even if they told that drugs will only ruin their life, the feeling they get from doing the drugs allow them to escape the world and all the stress with it. This is certainly a practice that should not be condoned but I think that is one of the reasons this sort of thing happen.

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~Teacher May


By the way, here are some of your corrections:


The sad thing is its not just celebrities who are ruining their lives with drugs and alcohol.I won\'t pretend that it isn\'t more accessible to celebrities because they have lots of money and the means to have it but this is a problem in every day life that just about anyone can fell into their not careful.

>>  The sad thing is, it\'s not only the celebrities who are ruining their lives with drugs and alcohol. I won\'t pretend that it isn\'t more accessible to celebrities because they have a ;lot of money and the means to have it, but this is a problem in everyday life  that anyone can fell into when their not careful.

Also, the celebrities that cannot adjust to the stress of their new life will lean on drugs for support.

>> Also, those celebrities that cannot adjust to the stress of their new life, they depend on drugs for support.

Even if they told that drugs will only ruin their life, the feeling they get from doing the drugs allow them to escape the world and all the stress with it.

>> Even if you inform them that using drugs will only ruin their life, the feeling that they get from it allows them to escape the world and all the stress with it.

This is certainly a practice that should not be condoned but I think that is one of the reasons this sort of thing happen.

>> This is certainly a practice that should not be condoned, but I think that it is one of the reasons this sort of thing happen.

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