Why do many people from different parts of the world want to improve their English?

2019-05-08 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

학생이 쓴 원문

I think the USA influence many people from different countries in various ways. When I was young, I could see many American movies, drama series, songs, singers, cosmetics, fashion, food, medicine, guns, games and so on. For example, I watched the movie \'Titanic\' and I fell in love with Leonardo Dicaprio at first sight. I started to learn English to write a fan letter to him. Also I liked to play video games and computer games. I felt that games made from USA was much more fun so I played it even though it was not translated to Korean yet. I just tried to translate it by myself while I was playing it. Like I wanted to improve my English to send a fan letter to a handsome actor and to enjoy the American games, I think the American culture gives a lot of influence to people in many ways and they feel necessity to learn and improve it.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!

I enjoyed reading this composition so much! ^^
It is true, the US has a big influence to people.
Thank you for taking time to make this.
It\'s so adorable how you started to learn English because you wanted to write a letter to Leonardo Dicaprio! ^^
You are so full of perseverance, and I think that\'s my favorite thing about you.
You always try to find different and fun ways to learn.
I hope you remain this enthusiastic and driven. ^^
See you tomorrow!

~~t. Ally

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I think the USA influence many people from different countries in various ways.
>> I think the USA has influenced so many people from different countries in various ways.

When I was young, I could see many American movies, drama series, songs, singers, cosmetics, fashion, food, medicine, guns, games and so on.
>> When I was young, I saw many American movies, drama series, songs, singers, cosmetics, fashion food, medicine, guns and many more which were all from the US.

For example, I watched the movie \'Titanic\' and I fell in love with Leonardo Dicaprio at first sight.
>> CORRECT!

I started to learn English to write a fan letter to him.
>> CORRECT!

Also I liked to play video games and computer games.
>> CORRECT!

I felt that games made from USA was much more fun so I played it even though it was not translated to Korean yet.
>> CORRECT!

I just tried to translate it by myself while I was playing it.
>> CORRECT!

Like I wanted to improve my English to send a fan letter to a handsome actor and to enjoy the American games,
I think the American culture gives a lot of influence to people in many ways and they feel necessity to learn and improve it.
>> Like I wanted to improve my English skills to send a fan letter to a handsome actor and to enjoy the American games.
I think the American culture gives a lot of influence to people in many ways, and they feel like it has become a necessity to learn and improve it.

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