Why do our dreams change as we grow older?
학생이 쓴 원문
We know and see the more broad words.
We think our dream is not wanted or not easily. And then people forget their dream. This thought is sad. However, because we see and feel many things, we can find the more interest anything.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름] [이름]! Indeed, as we grow up, our dreams change because we see and learn more about the world around us, which shapes what we want and what we dream about. Great points ^^
~T. Jenna
We know and see the more broad words.
>> Our dreams change as we age because we know and see more of the world.
We think our dream is not wanted or not easily.
We think our dream is not wanted or not easily.
>>We think our dreams are not wanted or not easily attainable.
And then people forget their dream.
>> As a consequence, we tend to forget our dreams.
This thought is sad.
Correct, or
>>This is disheartening.
However, because we see and feel many things, we can find the more interest anything.
>>However, because we see and feel many things, we can find more interest in anything.
OR
>> However, as we observe and experience more, our capacity to find interest in anything grows.
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