Why do some Koreans choose to remain/stay single? What do you think are its advantages and disadvant

2020-01-07 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

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Remaining single is attracted attention in Korea because many people are giving up to marry for many reasons. It is hard to bring up child. It need a lot of money and time. Some people sacrifice their careers. And according to research in 2014, parents spend 340 thousand dollars during 22 years. I think it is increased now. Also people don’t want to marry due to many other reasons. I think it is individual choice. It have advantages and disadvantages. If people stay single, they spend something for themselves like money and time. Also, they don’t need to stress by family. But, they may feel lonely because they live alone. Sometimes family help our life to make happy and give stability for being. Because they are always on their side to support them. If people think it advantages are better than disadvantages, they will choose to stay single. If they are the opposite, they will also choose not to stay single. Just their choice.

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Remaining single is attracted attention in Korea because many people are giving up to marry for many reasons.
>>CORRECT!
It is hard to bring up child.
>>CORRECT!
It need a lot of money and time.
>>It needs a lot of money and time.
Some people sacrifice their careers.
>>CORRECT!
And according to research in 2014, parents spend 340 thousand dollars during 22 years.
>>CORRECT!
I think it is increased now.
>>CORRECT!
Also people don’t want to marry due to many other reasons.
>>CORRECT!
I think it is individual choice.
>>CORRECT!
>>I think it is an individual choice.
It have advantages and disadvantages.
>>It has advantages and disadvantages.
If people stay single, they spend something for themselves like money and time.
>>CORRECT!
Also, they don’t need to stress by family.
>>Also, they don’t need to be stressed out their by family.
But, they may feel lonely because they live alone.
>>CORRECT!
Sometimes family help our life to make happy and give stability for being.
>>CORRECT!
Because they are always on their side to support them.
>>CORRECT!
If people think it advantages are better than disadvantages, they will choose to stay single.
>>If people think the advantages are better than the disadvantages, they will choose to stay single.
If they are the opposite, they will also choose not to stay single.
>>CORRECT!
Just their choice.
>>CORRECT!
>>It\'s just their choice.

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