Why do we believe violence is so prevalent in today\'s society and what can we do about it?

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Because some people think that violence is personal choices.

>> Violence is prevalent in today\'s society because some people think that violence is a personal choice.

However, any personal choices can not be justified over the human dignity.

>> However, any personal choice can not be justified over human dignity.

who can advocate the value of human dignity in the violent society?

>> Who can advocate the value of human dignity in this violent society?

That is not diffrent to the end of mankind.

>> That is not different with the end of mankind.

we must emphasize the necessity of nonviolence each other not to destroy ourselves.

>> We must emphasize the necessity of nonviolence to each other so as not to destroy ourselves.

To do that we have to stop the emotional violences that weigh ourselves down first.

>> CORRECT

The sum of these efforts make huge nonviolence stream in the nation and the world.

>> CORRECT

Therefore, justification of nonviolence can be so prevalent worldwide.

>> Therefore, justification of nonviolence is so prevalent worldwide.

(Avery, Sorry for the over sentenses....:( the topic is too heavy, so I was inevitable............)

>> The topic is too heavy that adding more sentences was inevitable.