Why do we need to exercise?
학생이 쓴 원문
We need exercise because exercise makes us get healthy. More in detail it can help immune system forward and be not easy to infect in the virus. Also, exercise can help producing more positive energy which is Endorphin so it makes you spend happy day. Lastly exercise helps the most important thing that eating well, sleeping well and thinking well. This is why we have to do some exercise.
강사 첨삭
Hi Risa,
Exercise helps people lose weight and lower the risk of some diseases. Exercising regularly lowers a person\'s risk of developing some diseases, including obesity and high blood pressure. Exercise also can help keep your body at a healthy weight. Exercise can help a person age well. Exercise regularly. ~ Teacher QUENNY..:)
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We need exercise because exercise makes us get healthy.
>> We need exercise because exercising makes us strong and healthy.
More in detail it can help immune system forward and be not easy to infect in the virus.
>> More in detail it can help and give us a strong immune system and we will not be infected easily with the virus.
Also, exercise can help producing more positive energy which is Endorphin so it makes you spend happy day.
>> Also, exercise can help produce more positive energy which is Endorphin so it makes you spend a happy day.
Lastly exercise helps the most important thing that eating well, sleeping well and thinking well.
>> Lastly, exercise helps to have a good appetite, good and enough sleep and boost our mental health so that we can think well and that\'s the most important why we need to exercise.
This is why we have to do some exercise.
>> This is why we have to do exercise regularly.
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We need exercise because exercise makes us get healthy. More in detail it can help immune system forward and be not easy to infect in the virus. Also, exercise can help producing more positive energy which is Endorphin so it makes you spend happy day. Lastly exercise helps the most important thing that eating well, sleeping well and thinking well. This is why we have to do some exercise.
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