Why do you need a moblie phone?
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I need a moblie phone, or the kids phone.
It\'s because I need a timer, picture, internet and a call phone too.
And also I need map and a calcalater too.
Lastly I need a phone because of a masage and a weather forecast if we use these weneed a phone.
But I have a mint color phone.
These reasons are we need a phone.
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Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Always do your best!
~ T. Camille
I need a moblie phone, or the kids phone.
>> Kids need a mobile phone.
It\'s because I need a timer, picture, internet and a call phone too.
>> It\'s because I need a timer, a camera to take pictures, internet, and a phone to call important people.
And also I need map and a calcalater too.
>> I also need a map and a calculator.
Lastly I need a phone because of a masage and a weather forecast if we use these weneed a phone.
>> Lastly, I need a phone to send or receive messages, and to check the weather forecast.
But I have a mint color phone.
>> I have a mint-colored phone.
These reasons are we need a phone.
>> These are the reasons why we need a phone.
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