Why do you think Australia is currently experiencing a crisis on bushfires?
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Bushfires of Australia started in September and it has lasted still.
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Many experts said cause of this bushfires is climate change.
>>Many experts said cause of bushfires climate change became severe.
Australia suffered bushfires every year because of El Nino.
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But average temperature of Australia is increasing continuously due to climate change.
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Because high temperature is satisfied necessary condition which is ignition point.
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Also, flame is spread out far die to strong wind.
>> Also, flame is spread out far due to strong wind.
Moreover, smog is occurred by bushfire make a cumulonimbus.
>>Moreover, smog is occurred by bushfire and make cumulonimbus.
A cumulonimbus is also occurred to lightening and can cause new bushfire.
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Furthermore, it become difficult environment to rain.
>> Furthermore, it become more difficult to rain.
I also think this situation is worse by Australia government.
>>I also think this situation is worsen by Australia government.
Last year, Korea government solved forest fire through a quick response to send whole country’s firefighter without minimum. resource.
>>Last year, Korea government solved forest fire through a quick response to send whole country’s firefighters without minimum resources.
But president of Australia went on vacation during continuing bushfire.
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They didn’t recognize danger of situation so, they can’t respond properly and rapid.
>>They didn’t recognize danger of situation so, they can’t respond properly and rapidly.
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