Why do you think children like chocolate?
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Most of children tend to like something sweet such as ice cream, juice, candies and chocolate. Chocolate is particular one of the sweet foods children like. I also like the foods that contain chocolate like chocolate cookies, chocolate cake and chocolate ice cream. I think somehow chocolate make them feel so good and give them some energe maybe because of some caffeine inside. Besides sometimes chocolate could be a nice gift for kids on special day like Valentine day, Halloween day and Easter day. That is why many kids love chocolate since they were early young.
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Most of children tend to like something sweet such as ice cream, juice,
candies and chocolate. Chocolate is particular one of the sweet foods
children like. I also like the foods that contain chocolate like
chocolate cookies, chocolate cake and chocolate ice cream. I think
somehow chocolate make them feel so good and give them some energe maybe
because of some caffeine inside. Besides sometimes chocolate could be a
nice gift for kids on special day like Valentine day, Halloween day and
Easter day. That is why many kids love chocolate since they were early
young.
>> Most of children tend to like something sweet such as ice cream, juice,
candies and chocolate. Chocolate is particular one of the sweet foods
children like. I also like foods that contain chocolate like
chocolate cookies, chocolate cake and chocolate ice cream. I think
somehow chocolates make them feel so good and give them some energy maybe
because of some caffeine inside. Besides sometimes chocolate could be a
nice gift for kids on special day like Valentines day, Halloween and
Easter day. That is why many kids love chocolate since they were
young.
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