Why do you think it is important to save money?
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I think saving money is important. Firstly, If I save lots of money I would use them in the emergency like I really need money right away. Secondly, I can find the worth of money and I can feel fulfilled from saving money and that makes me even more grow up and independent. I think the best thing is that I can buy something I really want to have with my own money without my parents help.
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I think saving money is important. Firstly, If I save lots of money I
would use them in the emergency like I really need money right away.
Secondly, I can find the worth of money and I can feel fulfilled from
saving money and that makes me even more grow up and independent. I
think the best thing is that I can buy something I really want to have
with my own money without my parents help.
>> I think saving money is important. Firstly, If I save lots of money I
would use them in an emergency like I really need money right away.
Secondly, I can feel the value of money and I can feel fulfilled from
saving money and that makes me even more a grown up and independent. I
think the best thing is that I can buy something I really want to have
with my own money without my parent\'s help.
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