Why do you think K-pop is becoming more popular?
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Most of all, I want to tell you that they have a huge storytelling and outstanding good-looking.
First, K-pop has a view of the world stand alone. For example, The BTS who one of the most popular groups has had a story of growing up in fear. They became famous for this story and got for huge popularity. A famous girl group ASPA also owns a story to themselves only. So, the popularity secret what they are not only singing and dancing but also they are making a story.
Second, anyone yearn for a beautiful person. The mostly audition programs that I have seen have considered more important an appearance than ability. I think what for yearn someone isn\'t bad, but people must be careful not to become an obsession into what for yearning. The So[이름] who I like artist also had a hard time because of malicious comments of appearance. Of course, the all K-pop stars\' appearance is so awesome. But we have to be careful what estimate for other people\'s appearance, even thogh compliments.
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Good day, Da [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
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Most of all, I want to tell you that they have a huge storytelling and outstanding good-looking.
>> First of all, I want to tell you that they have a huge storytelling and outstandingly good-looking.
OR >> Firstly, I want to tell you that they have a huge storytelling and outstandingly good-looking.
First, K-pop has a view of the world stand alone.
>> CORRECT!For example, The BTS who one of the most popular groups has had a story of growing up in fear.
>> For example, BTS who is one of the most popular groups has a story of growing up in fear.
They became famous for this story and got for huge popularity.
>> They became famous for this story and got huge popularity.
A famous girl group AESPA also owns a story to themselves only.
>> CORRECT!So, the popularity secret what they are not only singing and dancing but also they are making a story.
>> So, their popularity\'s secret is that they are not only singing and dancing, but they are also making a story.
>> So, their popularity\'s secret is that they are not only singing and dancing, but they are also making a story.
Second, anyone yearn for a beautiful person.
>> Secondly, anyone yearns for a beautiful person or people.
The mostly audition programs that I have seen have considered more important an appearance than ability.
>> Most audition programs that I have seen have considered appearance more important than their ability.
I think what for yearn someone isn\'t bad, but people must be careful not to become an obsession into what for yearning.
>> I think what we yearn from someone isn\'t bad, but people must be careful not to become obsessed with what we are yearning for.
The So[이름] who I like artist also had a hard time because of malicious comments of appearance.
The So[이름] who I like artist also had a hard time because of malicious comments of appearance.
>> So[이름], the artist who I like, also had a hard time because of malicious comments of appearance.
Of course, the all K-pop stars\' appearance is so awesome.
>> Of course, all K-pop stars\' appearance is so awesome.
But we have to be careful what estimate for other people\'s appearance, even thogh compliments.
>> But we have to be careful of what we estimate regarding other people\'s appearance, even though they are compliments.
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