Why do you think Paralympics was created and established? Does it help people with disabilities? In
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Paralympic started from small groups consisted of soldiers who became paraplegic because of the Second World War.
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Dr.Guttmann made exercise for recovering patients.
>>Dr. [Name] made exercises for recovering patients.
So, Paralympic was named from paraplegic and Olympic.
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However, now, the meaning of name changed parallel which they don’t differ with non-disabled people after players form other disabled people.
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Disorder make people hard at daily life.
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Especially people who are disabled suddenly may suffer not only physical pain but also mental pain.
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Because they are restricted something.
>> Because they are restricted into doing something.
It makes people lethargic and negative.
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I think Paralympic give them goal.
>>I think Paralympic give them goals.
Goal makes people alive.
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Also, Disabled people will feel that they can do anything.
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They will have the reason why they live through the Paralympic.
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Furthermore, they will exercise to win the game.
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Exercise is good medicine to cure depression.
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Thus, Paralympic will make them to overcome physical and mental pain.
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