Why do you think people commit crimes?

2023-02-28 · 첨삭 강사 Jhozel

학생이 쓴 원문

There are many factors that can contribute to criminal behavior. I think poverty is the most important factors. If there is someone too poor, they may steal. Like Jean Valjean. Poverty is a problem for the Government to overcome and solve. They need to solve the problem by creating jobs and increasing welfare.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름] U!
Thank you for finishing your assignment. You did an excellent job!
Anyway, see you tomorrow!
-T.Jhozel 
There are many factors that can contribute to criminal behavior. 
>> Correct!
I think poverty is the most important factors. 
>> I think poverty is the most important factor. 
If there is someone too poor, they may steal. 
>> If someone is too poor, they might steal.
Like Jean Valjean. 
>> Correct!
Poverty is a problem for the Government to overcome and solve. 
>> Correct!
They need to solve the problem by creating jobs and increasing welfare.
>> They must address the issue by creating jobs and increasing welfare.

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·