Why do you think people have pets?
학생이 쓴 원문
First, pet can make people feel happy at home. Before I got my pet, I don’t like staying at home a lot of time, and going to home early. But now, I like it. I tend to play my pet as soon as I get off work. And I want to go home early so that I walk my dog.
Secondary, Getting a pet helps people be healthy and regular. If you have a dog, as you know, you should walk the dog every day. So after you get off work, you will go out to walk. You can run with your dog, and get a fresh air.
Finally, people learn a sense of responsibility from their pet. It’s very important thing of getting a pet. The sense can help their work, raising their child and being social person.
강사 첨삭
Hi Elena!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. CamilleFirst, pet can make people feel happy at home.
>> First, pets can make people feel happy at home.
Before I got my pet, I don’t like staying at home a lot of time, and going to home early.
>> Before I got my pet, I don’t like staying at home a lot of times, and going home early.
OR >> Before I got my pet, I don’t like staying at home or even going home early.
But now, I like it.
>> CORRECT!
I tend to play my pet as soon as I get off work.
>> I tend to play with my pet as soon as I get off work.
OR >> I tend to play with my pet as soon as I get off from work.
And I want to go home early so that I walk my dog.
>> And I want to go home early so that I can walk my dog.
OR >> Also, I want to go home early so I can take a walk with my dog.
Secondary, Getting a pet helps people be healthy and regular.
>> Second, getting a pet helps people be healthy.
OR >> Second, getting a pet helps people stay fit.
If you have a dog, as you know, you should walk the dog every day.
>> CORRECT!
So after you get off work, you will go out to walk.
>> CORRECT!
You can run with your dog, and get a fresh air.
>> CORRECT!
Finally, people learn a sense of responsibility from their pet.
Finally, people learn a sense of responsibility from their pet.
>> CORRECT!
It’s very important thing of getting a pet.
>> It’s a very important thing about getting a pet.
OR >> It’s the most important thing about having a pet.
The sense can help their work, raising their child and being social person.
>> The sense can help their work, raising their child, and being a sociable person.
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