Why do you think people should or shouldn\'t have hobbies?

2019-03-19 · 첨삭 강사 Selene

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Actually, I think I don\'t have a hobby until now. Nowadays I feel lonely because my best friends are preparing their weddings. And, my boyfriend is far away with me. So I sometimes feel lonely and sad. For overcoming this feeling, I think I should make a hobby. Good hobby will be make me happy and be stable. So I am finding for bowling club now. I hope I have good at bowling and enjoy it.

강사 첨삭

Hello Kate!^^

Thank you for taking the time to make your homework. It\'s a good practice for your writing skills. Take care and have a nice day!^^


Nowadays I feel lonely because my best friends are preparing their weddings.

>>>Nowadays, I feel lonely because my best friends are preparing for their weddings.

And, my boyfriend is far away with me.

>>>And my boyfriend is far away from me.

So I sometimes feel lonely and sad. For overcoming this feeling, I think I should make a hobby.

>>>So sometimes I feel lonely and sad.

For overcoming this feeling, I think I should make a hobby.

>>> In order to overcome this feeling, I think I should make a hobby.

Good hobby will be make me happy and be stable. 

>>>A good hobby will make me happy and be stable. 

So I am finding for bowling club now.

>>>So I am looking for a bowling club now.

I hope I have good at bowling and enjoy it.

>>>I hope I will be good at bowling and enjoy it.

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