Why do you think people with mental imbalance or disabilities struggle to be around other people?
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Nowadays, many people have a difficult about managing mind.
>>Nowadays, many people have a difficulty about managing mental stability.
People who can\'t manage their mind is suffering the depression and it became big social problem in Korea.
>>People who can\'t manage their mind is suffering from depression and it became a big social problem in Korea.
Because of depression, many people decided to suicide although they are succeed socially.
>>Because of depression, many people decided to suicide although they are sociable.
I think these people may hurt their mind from other people or situation in the past.
>>I think these people may have painful memory from other people or situation in the past.
So, they lost the confidence about themselves.
>>CORRECT!
They are a lack of self-regard.
>>They are lacking of self-regard.
Thus, they rely on other people more and more.
>>CORRECT!
Also, they are afraid of being alone and try to effort to get recognized to other people.
>>Also, they are afraid of being alone and trying efforts to get recognized by other people.
Eventually, it makes them lonelier and is a vicious circle.
>>Eventually, it makes them lonelier and it\'s a vicious circle.
To overcome their situation, they should recover the confidence.
>>To overcome their situation, they should recover their confidence.
They should try to effort developing inner side not appearance.
>> They should try developing inner side not appearance.
First, they should know themselves and then concentrate that like what they like, what they do well.
>>First, they should know themselves and then concentrate on what they like and what they do well.
If they recognize themselves as precious people, they will have confidence and they will not rely on other people anymore.
>>CORRECT!
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