Why do you think so many people lie traveling?
학생이 쓴 원문
Thought I don\'t like to go on a trip but according to previous my travel and friends who enjoy journey, by traveling, we could break out of the daily routine and release stress. Meeting new someone and challenging something new are quite interesting and exciting experience. Furthermore, it could be the chance to expand horizon and widen knowledge. Going to travel by myself or with others are not important I think. Early of this year, I went to Hong-Kong alone for a test and kind of a trip. Before I have never traveled by myself, so I was a little bit afraid of this trip. However, the trip was the best of trip ever and I made lots of memories just about me. During being alone at strange areas, I thought deeply about me I naver tried in Korea because usually I didn\'t have time to think like that and arranged my complicated situations I went throught in my routine. It is just not my experience. Many people could feel like me after travel. So, it is the reason why people like traveling.
강사 첨삭
Hello Jin! Thanks once again for this. Traveling indeed is fun, in most cases. It gives you a new experience and may even change your perspective in life.
- T. Beth
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Thought I don\'t like to go on a trip but according to previous my travel and friends who enjoy journey, by traveling, we could break out of the daily routine and release stress. >>>> OR: Though I don\'t like going on a trip, according to my previous travels and friends who enjoy it, we can break out of the daily routine and release stress by traveling.
Meeting new someone and challenging something new are quite interesting and exciting experience.
>>>> Meeting new people and challenging ourselves with something new are quite interesting and exciting experiences.
Furthermore, it could be the chance to expand horizon and widen knowledge.
>>>> correct
Going to travel by myself or with others are not important I think.
>>>> correct ( Going to travel by myself or with others are not important, I think. )
Early of this year, I went to Hong-Kong alone for a test and kind of a trip.
>>>> Early this year, I went to Hong-Kong alone for a test and it was also a kind of a trip.
Before I have never traveled by myself, so I was a little bit afraid of this trip.
>>>> OR: I have never traveled by myself before, so I was a little bit afraid of this trip.
However, the trip was the best of trip ever and I made lots of memories just about me.
>>>> OR: However, the trip was the best trip ever and I made lots of memories just for myself.
During being alone at strange areas, I thought deeply about me I naver tried in Korea because usually I didn\'t have time to think like that and arranged my complicated situations I went throught in my routine.
>>>> While being alone in strange areas, I thought deeply about myself which I have never tried in Korea because usually I didn\'t have time to think like that and arrange my complicated situations I went through in my routine.
It is just not my experience.
>>>> OR: I just have not experienced it.
Many people could feel like me after travel.
>>>> Many people could feel like me after traveling.
So, it is the reason why people like traveling.
>>>> correct
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