Why do you think the temperatures in Antarctica and the Arctic regions are consistently increasing?
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Because of climate change, temperature of earth is increasing continuously!
>>CORRECT!
Climate change is a vicious circle.
>>CORRECT!
Because of using fossil fuel, temperature has increased.
>> CORRECT!
Thus, ozone layer have had a hole ice due to greenhouse gas and ice of the Antarctica and the Arctic has melt as taking UV rays.
>CORRECT!
Also, sea level has increased by melting ice and ice has broken in small which is easier to melt because of increasing surface area.
>>CORRECT!
Furthermore, by reducing ice area, the earth can absorb UV rays more and the temperature has increased more and more.
>>CORRECT!
The average temperature of earth had increased about 1 celsius degree during 100 years after industrial revolution.
>> The average temperature of earth had increased about 1 degree Celsius during 100 years after industrial revolution.
It sounds like low temperature.
>>CORRECT!
But, if average temperature increase over 2 celsius degrees, we are hard to get water and food.
>>But, if average temperature increase over 2 degrees Celsius , we are hard to get water and food.
Also, humans can’t control the temperature anymore.
>>CORRECT!
We don’t have a lot of time left, so we should treat to climate change as soon as possible.
>>We don’t have a lot of time left, so we should treat climate change as soon as possible.
Because now is climate crisis!
>>CORRECT!
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