Why do you think the virus easily spreads in countries with high population?
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Thanks to development of science, humans have overcame many diseases.
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Now, many diseases like smallpox are disappeared in history.
>>Now, many diseases like smallpox disappeared in history.
However, new diseases are occurring and recently, many people died because of new corona virus in China.
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These viruses are usually occurred in countries with high population.
>>These viruses usually occurred in countries with high population.
First, viruses are parasitic on host like humans.
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The more humans are, the easier virus live.
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Because although one host died, viruses can find new host easily.
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It is favorable environment for them.
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Thus, many countries isolate suspected people who are infected.
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Also, it is more difficult to manage as much as a group is big.
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Big group have a possibility which can contact many people in short time and a danger which can’t control them easily.
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And also, it needs more manpower and resources like money.
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Especially, if the country don’t have disease management system, the situation is easy to become worse.
>>Especially, if the country doesn’t have disease management system, the situation is easy to become worse.
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