Why do you think watching television can be bad?
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As there are many elements of fun, we could easily be addicted. And this addiction brings bad phenomenon. It is easy to waste time once we lose control of our time watching TV. If we start to insist only fun and entertaining things, sometimes real world could feel boring. Also, if we continue to acquire knowledge on television every time, we might feel books are boring and do not read it. For stimulating and exciting story, movies often distort facts such as history. This can be educationally bad because it leads to acquire information which is not true. Television addiction can also worsen our health. If we look video media right before or right after bedtime, unhealthy hormones may be released. In addition, if we look at the screen too long, our eye sight will deteriorate. For these reasons, I think watching television can be bad.
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As there are many elements of fun, we could easily be addicted. And this addiction brings bad phenomenon.
- Teacher Sophia
As there are many elements of fun, we could easily be addicted. And this addiction brings bad phenomenon.
>> As there are many elements of fun, we could easily be addicted and this addiction brings bad phenomenon.
It is easy to waste time once we lose control of our time watching TV.
>> Correct
If we start to insist only fun and entertaining things, sometimes real world could feel boring.
>> If we start to insist only the fun and entertaining things, sometimes the real world could feel boring.
Also, if we continue to acquire knowledge on television every time, we might feel books are boring and do not read it.
>> Also, if we continue to acquire knowledge on television every time, we might feel that books are boring and would not read it.
For stimulating and exciting story, movies often distort facts such as history.
>> Correct
This can be educationally bad because it leads to acquire information which is not true.
>> This can be educationally bad because it leads to acquired information which is not true.
Television addiction can also worsen our health.
>> Correct
If we look video media right before or right after bedtime, unhealthy hormones may be released.
>> Correct
In addition, if we look at the screen too long, our eye sight will deteriorate.
>> Correct
For these reasons, I think watching television can be bad.
>> Correct
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