Why do you think we should hire you?/what is your strong point?
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I believe that I am perfect for this job because I have a global mind.
>>I believe that I am perfect for this job because I have a global mindset.
when I went abroad for language studies in the Philippine, I met with various country people and I could understand their mind and costoms of other country.
>>When I went to the Philippines for language studies, I met many foreigners and I could understand their mind and customs.
at least once, my Japanese friend told me about his future and he was worried about the path of choice.
>>At least once, my Japanese friend told me about his future and he was worried about his choice of path.
It was really important for him. so I first listened to his story, and I tried to give him some advice in hopes of making a good choice.
>>It was really important for him so, I first listened to his story, and I tried to give him pieces of advice hoping for him to make a good choice.
so He thanked me and told me that you\'re good friend.
>>So, he thanked me and told me that I am a good friend.
I was really proud of it.
>>CORRECT
even though I could not communicate in perfect language. I learned how to communicate and understand people from other countries.
>>Even though I could not effectively handle conversations using the language,
I learned how to communicate and understand people from other countries.
I think that my grobal mind will help your company to do work well.
>>I think that my global mindset will help your company to work well.
I\'m good at giving advice whenever my friends have problems, they ask me for some advice when I talk to them so, I start by just listening, and empathizing with them instead of telling them what they should have done properly.
>>I\'m good at giving advice. Whenever my friends have problems, they ask me for some advice when I talk to them so, I start by simply listening, and empathizing with them instead of telling them what they should have done.
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