Why do you think we should hire you?/what is your strong point?

2018-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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I believe that I am perfect for this job because I have a global mind. when I went abroad for language studies in the Philippine, I met with various country people and I could understand their mind and costoms of other country. at least once, my Japanese friend told me about his future and he was worried about the path of choice. It was really important for him. so I first listened to his story, and I tried to give him some advice in hopes of making a good choice. so He thanked me and told me that you're good friend. I was really proud of it. even though I could not communicate in perfect language. I learned how to communicate and understand people from other countries. I think that my grobal mind will help your company to do work well. I'm good at giving advice whenever my friends have problems, they ask me for some advice when I talk to them so, I start by just listening, and empathizing with them instead of telling them what they should have done properly.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]! You must be busy preparing for the test! ^^ Have a good day~!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

I believe that I am perfect for this job because I have a global mind.

>>I believe that I am perfect for this job because I have a global mindset.
when I went abroad for language studies in the Philippine, I met with various country people and I could understand their mind and costoms of other country.

>>When I went  to the Philippines for language studies, I met many foreigners and I could understand their mind and customs.
at least once, my Japanese friend told me about his future and he was worried about the path of choice.

>>At least once, my Japanese friend told me about his future and he was worried about his choice of path.

It was really important for him. so I first listened to his story, and I tried to give him some advice in hopes of making a good choice.

>>It was really important for him so, I first listened to his story, and I tried to give him pieces of advice hoping for him to make a good choice.

so He thanked me and told me that you\'re good friend.

>>So, he thanked me and told me that I am a good friend.

I was really proud of it.

>>CORRECT
even though I could not communicate in perfect language. 
 I learned how to communicate and understand people from other countries.

>>Even though I could not effectively handle conversations using the language,
I learned how to communicate and understand people from other countries.
I think that my grobal mind will help your company to do work well.

>>I think that my global mindset will help your company to work well.

I\'m good at giving advice whenever my friends have problems, they ask me for some advice when I talk to them so, I start by just listening, and empathizing with them instead of telling them what they should have done properly.

>>I\'m good at giving advice. Whenever my friends have problems, they ask me for some advice when I talk to them so, I start by simply listening, and empathizing with them instead of telling them what they should have done.


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