Why do you think work conditions in the healthcare set-up should be regularly checked and improved?
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Health condition of medical providers directly affect to the patient\'s care because healthcare workers deal with serious patients who need to intensive treatment and diagnososis. If doctors have bad condition during surgery, we are not able to expect better results. The research paper has been published about the impact to the patients according to the hospital workers condition. Patients can expect better results in the morning than the afternoon because doctors may have clear condition at morning time. Being aging society, there will be more patients but we don\'t have enough facilities to treat them. In addition, patients would like to get the best treatment in the famous hospitals. So, doctors don\'t have enough time to see patients. They can\'t answer what patients would like to know due to too many patients. Nurses are also have same problem. They are asked to care more than international standard because of our environmnt. Some workers found on dead due to the heavy workload.
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Thank you for this Sir [이름]. I know how it is like in working in the hospital. It\'s really like going to war every single day.
Health condition of medical providers directly affect to the patient\'s care because healthcare workers deal with serious patients who need to intensive treatment and diagnososis.
>>> Health condition of medical providers directly affect to the patient\'s care because healthcare workers deal with serious patients who need intensive treatment and diagnosis.
If doctors have bad condition during surgery, we are not able to expect better results.
>>> correct
The research paper has been published about the impact to the patients according to the hospital workers condition.
>>> A research paper has been published about the impact of the hospital workers condition to the treatment and recovery of patients.
Patients can expect better results in the morning than the afternoon because doctors may have clear condition at morning time.
>>> correct
Being aging society, there will be more patients but we don\'t have enough facilities to treat them.
>>> Being an aging society, there will be more patients but we don\'t have enough facilities to treat them.
In addition, patients would like to get the best treatment in the famous hospitals.
>>> correct
So, doctors don\'t have enough time to see patients.
>>> correct
They can\'t answer what patients would like to know due to too many patients.
>>> correct
Nurses are also have same problem.
>>> Nurses also have the same problem.
>>> OR: Nurses are not exempted to this.
They are asked to care more than international standard because of our environment.
>>> correct
>>> OR: They are asked to provide care above the international standard because of our environment.
Some workers found on dead due to the heavy workload.
>>> Some workers were found dead due to the heavy workload.
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