Why do you think work-life balance is important?
학생이 쓴 원문
First of all, we have to think about the reason why we have a job. I think job makes own\'s life more energetic. Also, we can feel that we are essential members of society getting job. Because having job means that utilizes own\'s ability and it relates to make a living. As a result, I think job is important but it\'s supplementary one in our life. We have job to make comfortable and meaningful life. So, work-life balance is very important. If we got so much stress because of work, it is meaningless. However, Korea\'s work circumstance is strict and stressful due to working time and order of rank. As I know, people in foreign do their work in fixed working time whether there are lots of things they have to do and equal order system makes company effective. That\'s why they can separate work and life well. Spending time with family is more valuable than doing their work. Although, Korean know that fact, but the system isn\'t helpful. So, law about working time and salary is really needed.
강사 첨삭
Thank you for this Mary.
First of all, we have to think about the reason why we have a job.
>>> correct
I think job makes own\'s life more energetic.
>>> OR: I think the job makes one\'s life more energetic/meaningful.
Also, we can feel that we are essential members of society getting job.
>>> correct
Because having job means that utilizes own\'s ability and it relates to make a living.
>>> Because having job means that one utilizes his/her ability and it relates to making a living.
As a result, I think job is important but it\'s supplementary one in our life.
>>> correct
>>> OR: As a result, I think job is important but it\'s a supplementary to one\'s life.
We have job to make comfortable and meaningful life.
>>> We have a job to make a comfortable and meaningful life.
So, work-life balance is very important.
>>> correct
If we got so much stress because of work, it is meaningless.
>>> correct
However, Korea\'s work circumstance is strict and stressful due to working time and order of rank.
>>> correct
As I know, people in foreign do their work in fixed working time whether there are lots of things they have to do and equal order system makes company effective.
>>> correct
That\'s why they can separate work and life well.
>>> correct
Spending time with family is more valuable than doing their work.
>>> correct
Although, Korean know that fact, but the system isn\'t helpful.
>>> Although Korean know that fact, the system isn\'t helpful.
So, law about working time and salary is really needed.
>>> correct
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