Why do you try to help out people? Why do you think you have to go beyond the limit?

2017-08-09 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

학생이 쓴 원문

That question was mine. I asked the same question to me many times. At first, I answered to me like that. “This is because it is fruitful or worthwhile to help out people” However, I came up with the more fundamental answer. “This is because it was my childhood resolution.” When I was child, every day my mother and I visited the market streets that were near my house. My mother bought some vegetables and meat for our dinner and I enjoyed the snack that my mother bought for me. Back then, there were always several old moms. They sat on the street and sold their vegetables in small plastic bowl. With young child eyes, they looked poor. So, I told my mother “Mom, when I become a grown-up someday, every day I will buy all vegetable that grand moms are selling, and then, they don’t need to sit and sell them like that. Come to think of it, I had wanted charity work. Unfortunately, when I grow up, I totally forgot my childhood resolution. I’ve struggled to win the game in a highly competitive society. But, recently, l asked me the same question again and again and eventually, I found my childhood resolution.

강사 첨삭

Good day Dr.!

I admire you for having a big heart to contribute to the society. Even though your were still a young boy, you do understand the situations of other people. You are truly a natural-born charitable man. Thank you for sharing your story a while back. Talking to you every day is really an eye-opener.

Enjoy the rest of the day!

See you ^^

~T. Eunice



That question was mine.
>> Correct
OR
>> I got that question to myself back when I was a little boy.
I asked the same question to me many times.
>> I asked myself with the same question several times.
At first, I answered to me like that.
>> At first, I answered like this.
“This is because it is fruitful or worthwhile to help out people”
>> This is because it is fruitful or worthwhile to help out people.

OR

>>> This is because it is more fruitful of worthwhile when I give and extend my help to people.
However, I came up with the more fundamental answer.
>> However, I came up with more fundamental answer.
“This is because it was my childhood resolution.”
>> It was because of my childhood resolution.

When I was child, every day my mother and I visited the market streets that were near my house.
>> When I was a child, my mother and I visited the nearby market streets every day. 
My mother bought some vegetables and meat for our dinner and I enjoyed the snack that my mother

bought for me.
>> My mother bought some vegetables and meat for our dinner and I enjoyed the snack that my mother had 

cooked for me.
Back then, there were always several old moms.
>> Correct
OR
>> Back then, there were old mothers on the street.
They sat on the street and sold their vegetables in small plastic bowl. With young child eyes, they

looked poor.
>> They sat on the street and sold their vegetables in a small plastic bowl.
With young child eyes, they looked poor.
>> They looked poor w
ith their young child\'s eyes.
OR
>> By looking at their young child\'s eyes, you can tell that they are poor.
So, I told my mother “Mom, when I become a grown-up someday, every day I will buy all vegetable

that grand moms are selling, and then, they don’t need to sit and sell them like that.
>> So I told my mother “Mom, when I grow up someday I will buy all the vegetables that those

grandmothers are selling so they don’t need to sit and sell for the whole day.
Come to think of it, I had wanted charity work.
>> If you come to think of it, I always wanted to do charity works.
Unfortunately, when I grow up, I totally forgot my childhood resolution.
>> Unfortunately, when I am all grown up, I totally forgot about my childhood resolution.
I’ve struggled to win the game in a highly competitive society.
>> Correct
But, recently, l asked me the same question again and again and eventually, I found my childhood

resolution. 
>> But, I recently asked myself with the same question twice and eventually, I remembered about my childhood resolution.

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