Why do you want to be a flight attendant?/ what's your personality?

2018-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

학생이 쓴 원문

There are three reasons why I applied for this job. First, I’m an outgoing and sociable person. I love meeting new people and that includes talking to them. Second, I have many years of hands on experience in the service industry. While I was in college, I worked as a waitress at a cafe and restaurant. Those experiences helped me to have a better understanding of customer’s needs. Third, I can understand different cultures and customs of other countries. This experience has broadened my view of the world and improved my communication skill. I’m really an outgoing and optimistic person, because I love meeting new people and participating in various activities like photo club, dance club and so on. That’s why I have a lot of friends and still keep the relationship up to now. when I face obstacles in life, I try to smile and think in a positive way rather than being depressed. This attitude helps me deal and overcome difficulties.

강사 첨삭

Hi there! Happy Monday to you! ^^ Please check your corrections! See you!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
There are three reasons why I applied for this job.
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>> I have three reasons why I applied for this job.
First, I’m an outgoing and sociable person.
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I love meeting new people and that includes talking to them.
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Second, I have many years of hands on experience in the service industry.
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While I was in college, I worked as a waitress at a cafe and restaurant.
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Those experiences helped me to have a better understanding of customer’s needs.
>> CORRECT
Third, I can understand different cultures and customs of other countries.
>> CORRECT
This experience has broadened my view of the world and improved my communication skill.
>> CORRECT
I’m really an outgoing and optimistic person, because I love meeting new people and participating in various activities like photo club, dance club and so on.
>> CORRECT
That’s why I have a lot of friends and still keep the relationship up to now. when I face obstacles in life, I try to smile and think in a positive way rather than being depressed.
>>That’s why I have a lot of friends and I still keep the relationship until now.
When I face obstacles in life, I try to smile and think in a positive way rather than being depressed.
>> When I face obstacles in life, I try to smile and think in a positive way rather than being depressed.
This attitude helps me deal and overcome difficulties.
>> CORRECT

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