Why do you want to have a busy life?
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to have a busy life.
Because busy life helps me improve.
This mean I can develop my self everyday and makes me diligent.
Also, there is no miscellaneous thoughts.
강사 첨삭
Thank you for sending this to me. It’s great that you’re using new words. However, we must be careful in choosing the correct and proper terms in a sentence. Good job! - Teacher Ivy
I want to have a busy life.
>> Correct
Because busy life helps me improve.
>> Because a busy life helps me improve.
This mean I can develop my self everyday and makes me diligent.
>> This means I can develop my self everyday and become diligent.
Also, there is no miscellaneous thoughts.
>> Also, there are no random thoughts.
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