Why do you want to work for us?
학생이 쓴 원문
After I just fresh graduate, I was lucky to have two years of many experience.
Unfortunately, I did many works by myself, and I was stressed out between professors and students in my preovious company.
But I didn\'t just suffer. I got the skill to handle things skillfully, and I took the skill to control disputes smoothly.
When I heard that you were looking for someone to join your company, I submitted my application right away.
Working with other people toward a team goal is something that I fiercely believe in. I\'m a huge believer in the importance of teamwork, working in a your company suit me well.
Not only am I teah-savvy and energetic, experienced, I\'m also enthusiastic and creative, high leadership.
I know that my skills can make me a valuable and perfect company member and help your company grow.
So, I can assure that I\'ll be the one who shines your company.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]! This is fantastic! There are just some grammar mistakes, and this could already be your spiel for this type of interview question. I would love to comment more regarding your answer, but I think it would be best to discuss it during our class. Thanks for this, and have a happy weekend!
~T. Jade^^
Why do you want to work for us?
After I just fresh graduate, I was lucky to have two years of many experience.
>> After I had just graduated, I was fortunate to gain two years of valuable experience.
Unfortunately, I did many works by myself, and I was stressed out between professors and students in my preovious company.
>> Unfortunately, I did a lot of work by myself, and I was stressed out dealing with professors and students in my previous company.
But I didn\'t just suffer.
>> Correct
I got the skill to handle things skillfully, and I took the skill to control disputes smoothly.
>> I acquired the ability to handle things adeptly and manage disputes smoothly.
When I heard that you were looking for someone to join your company, I submitted my application right away.
>> Correct
Working with other people toward a team goal is something that I fiercely believe in.
>> Correct
I\'m a huge believer in the importance of teamwork, working in a your company suit me well.
>> I\'m a huge believer in the importance of teamwork; working in your company suits me well.
Not only am I teah-savvy and energetic, experienced, I\'m also enthusiastic and creative, high leadership.
>> Not only am I tech-savvy and experienced, but I\'m also enthusiastic, creative, and possess strong leadership skills.
I know that my skills can make me a valuable and perfect company member and help your company grow.
>> Correct
So, I can assure that I\'ll be the one who shines your company.
~T. Jade^^
Why do you want to work for us?
After I just fresh graduate, I was lucky to have two years of many experience.
>> After I had just graduated, I was fortunate to gain two years of valuable experience.
Unfortunately, I did many works by myself, and I was stressed out between professors and students in my preovious company.
>> Unfortunately, I did a lot of work by myself, and I was stressed out dealing with professors and students in my previous company.
But I didn\'t just suffer.
>> Correct
I got the skill to handle things skillfully, and I took the skill to control disputes smoothly.
>> I acquired the ability to handle things adeptly and manage disputes smoothly.
When I heard that you were looking for someone to join your company, I submitted my application right away.
>> Correct
Working with other people toward a team goal is something that I fiercely believe in.
>> Correct
I\'m a huge believer in the importance of teamwork, working in a your company suit me well.
>> I\'m a huge believer in the importance of teamwork; working in your company suits me well.
Not only am I teah-savvy and energetic, experienced, I\'m also enthusiastic and creative, high leadership.
>> Not only am I tech-savvy and experienced, but I\'m also enthusiastic, creative, and possess strong leadership skills.
I know that my skills can make me a valuable and perfect company member and help your company grow.
>> Correct
So, I can assure that I\'ll be the one who shines your company.
>> So, I can assure you that I\'ll be the one who shines in your company.
>> OR: So, I can assure you that I will contribute significantly to the success of your company.
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