Why does the water really important to us?

2015-10-15 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

학생이 쓴 원문

Water is really important for an human,living creatures and plants.Especially for human, because 70%of our body is water.In addition, water id really useful to other thing as well.We use water when we flush down the toilet, wash our body,drink and other lots of things. If there was not enough water left on the earth we'll die because we can't drink the water.We can'y wash, flush and drink. Therefore we have to save the waters. From now on i am going to save the waters so that we can survive. PLEASE SAVE THE WATER PLEEASE!!

강사 첨삭

Hi there Min! Happy Thursday little lad:)   I wasn\'t expecting this composition from you but then I was amazed by it\'s concept or idea. For someone as young as you to think about conserving water is really admirable. But the way, for water, electricity or energy, it\'s better to use CONSERVE than SAVE. I hope that more young people like you will realize how important water is in our lives and that it is our responsibility to conserve and not waste water. Again, thank you for this composition and I applause you effort and intention.^___^ Yes, of course I am conserving water too.:)   ~Teacher Mayleen~     Water is really important for an human,living creatures and plants. >> Water is really important to human beings, animals, and plants.   Especially for human, because 70%of our body is water. >> Especially for us humans because 70% of our body is water.   In addition, water id really useful to other thing as well. >> In addition, water is really useful in our daily lives.   We use water when we flush down the toilet, wash our body,drink and other lots of things. >> We use water to flush down the toilet; to wash our body; to drink; and in a lot more things.   If there was not enough water left on the earth we\'ll die because we can\'t drink the water. >> If there is not enough water left on Earth, we\'ll die of thirst.   We can\'y wash, flush and drink. >> We can\'t wash, flush, and we\'ll have nothing to drink.   Therefore we have to save the waters. >> Therefore, we have to conserve water. From now on i am going to save the waters so that we can survive. >> From now on, I am going to conserve water so that we can survive. PLEASE SAVE THE WATER PLEEASE!! >> PLEASE HELP CONSERVE WATER!

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