Why electricity is sometimes called \"the lifeblood of modern society
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Electricity is sometimes called “the lifeblood of modern society”. because it is the fundamental, and it is indispensable energy source especially in modern society. And the electricity flows in a circuit through tiny particles called electrons.(usually wires)
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Why is electricity sometimes called \"the lifeblood of modern society?
Electricity is sometimes called “the lifeblood of modern society”. because it is the fundamental, and it is indispensable energy source especially in modern society.
>>> Electricity is sometimes called “the lifeblood of modern society” because it is a fundamental and indispensable energy source, especially today.
And the electricity flows in a circuit through tiny particles called electrons.(usually wires)
>>> It flows in a circuit through tiny particles called electrons, usually traveling through wires.
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