Why Fintech?
학생이 쓴 원문
I am drawn to the fintech industry from the \"democratization perspective.\" By lowering the barrier for access, the technology enables the financial market to be more open. A fast and straightforward way to transact the information would assist market participants with data for their investment decision and available revenue-generating opportunities. Within the fintech industry, Bloomberg is positioned as a market leader. Terminal has allowed market professionals to analyze accurate, concise, and relevant information. For example, clients could access market news via a computer, mobile phone, tablet PC, and even smartwatch by Bloomberg Anywhere. Also, the company combines alternative data like Twitter and Google Search to verify investment resources. These services empowered experts by differentiating market-moving data from rumors. I would like to work in an environment where I could enlighten the ambiguity of the financial market with wealth of market data.
강사 첨삭
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I am drawn to the fintech industry from the \"democratization perspective.\"
>>> OR: I am drawn to the fintech industry by the \"democratization perspective.\"
By lowering the barrier for access, the technology enables the financial market to be more open.
>>> correct
A fast and straightforward way to transact the information would assist market participants with data for their investment decision and available revenue-generating opportunities.
>>> correct
Within the fintech industry, Bloomberg is positioned as a market leader.
>>> correct
Terminal has allowed market professionals to analyze accurate, concise, and relevant information.
>>> correct
For example, clients could access market news via a computer, mobile phone, tablet PC, and even smartwatch by Bloomberg Anywhere.
>>> correct
Also, the company combines alternative data like Twitter and Google Search to verify investment resources.
>>> correct
These services empowered experts by differentiating market-moving data from rumors.
>>> correct
I would like to work in an environment where I could enlighten the ambiguity of the financial market with wealth of market data.
>>> I would like to work in an environment where I could enlighten the ambiguity of the financial market with the wealth of market data.
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