Why Goizueta? Part 2
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Third, you might know that I am a sponsored applicant. Busan Bank gave me a list of the top Business schools in the US, and they strongly recommended me to apply to Goizueta
finally, for my personal reason, my brother in law lives in Atlanta. I would like to take my wife and two children there. Under my situation, having a relative closely can help my family adapt to a new environment.
it can also help me with my studies, allowing me concentrate on my study.
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Good evening, [이름]!^^
Thank you for sharing your ideas. keep it up!^^
Third, you might know that I am a sponsored applicant.
>>>CORRECT!
Busan Bank gave me a list of the top Business schools in the US, and they strongly recommended me to apply to Goizueta
>>>Busan Bank gave me a list of the top business schools in the US, and they strongly recommended me in applying to Goizueta Business School.
finally, for my personal reason, my brother in law lives in Atlanta.
>>>Busan Bank gave me a list of the top business schools in the US, and they strongly recommended me in applying to Goizueta Business School.
finally, for my personal reason, my brother in law lives in Atlanta.
>>> Finally, for my personal reason, my brother-in-law lives in Atlanta.
I would like to take my wife and two children there.
>>>CORRECT!
Under my situation, having a relative closely can help my family adapt to a new environment.
>>> Given my situation, having a close relative can help with my family adapt to a new environment.
it can also help me with my studies, allowing me concentrate on my study.
it can also help me with my studies, allowing me concentrate on my study.
>>>It can also help me with my studies which would allow me to concentrate more.
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