Why I applied to Graduate school of Education.

2021-05-14 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

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Now I teach middle school students in English academy. I have an experience teaching a student who has no motivation on English learning itself. I tried several methods to help her focus on class. For example, I tried to draw her schematic knowledge and connect it with the topic of lecture. In grammar class, I used top-down and bottom up processing in order not to make boring grammar lecture. These methods were able to derive student\'s attention temporarily. I thought deeply and realized the student was lack of integrated motivation. As integrated motivation leads students to continuous learning, I want to investigate deeply on the integrated motivation in Graduate school.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! Thank you for the time you gave to answer the homework. Well done for the advanced vocabulary words you used here. Keep it up! Happy weekend!-Faith-
Now I teach middle school students in English academy. 
>> Now I teach middle school students in an English academy. 
I have an experience teaching a student who has no motivation on English learning itself. 
>> I have an experience teaching a student who has no motivation for English learning itself.
I tried several methods to help her focus on class. 
>> CORRECT
OR I used different approaches to help her focus on class. 
For example, I tried to draw her schematic knowledge and connect it with the topic of lecture. 
>> For example, I tried to draw her a schematic diagram and connect it with the topic of our lecture. 
In grammar class, I used top-down and bottom up processing in order not to make boring grammar lecture. 
>> In grammar class, I used top-down and bottom up processing in order not to make a boring grammar lecture. 
These methods were able to derive student\'s attention temporarily. 
>> CORRECT 
I thought deeply and realized the student was lack of integrated motivation. 
>> I thought deeply and realized the student lacked integrated regulation motivation.
As integrated motivation leads students to continuous learning, I want to investigate deeply on the integrated motivation in Graduate school.
>> As integrated regulation leads students to a continuous learning, I want to investigate the subject in graduate school.

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