Why I buy for some home appliances for my family.
학생이 쓴 원문
I buy some home appliances.
That is because home appliances are very convenient.
My second reason is when the house doesn\'t have some home appliances, we can\'t live in there.
My third reason is when we have some home appliances, we can be healthy.
Finally, when we buy some home appliances, my family will say thank you.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]! I hope someday you could buy home appliances for your family. I bet they would be glad and thankful for them.
- Teacher Debbie
>> I would buy some home appliances.
That is because home appliances are very convenient.
My second reason is when the house doesn\'t have some home appliances, we can\'t live in there.
My third reason is when we have some home appliances, we can be healthy.
Finally, when we buy some home appliances, my family will say thank you.
That is because home appliances are very convenient.
>> This is a good sentence.
My second reason is when the house doesn\'t have some home appliances, we can\'t live in there.
>> When a house doesn\'t have some home appliances, living there can be uncomfortable.
My third reason is when we have some home appliances, we can be healthy.
>> When we have some home appliances, we can be healthy.
Finally, when we buy some home appliances, my family will say thank you.
>> My family would say thank you if I bought them some home appliances.
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